1.作為副詞引導(dǎo)句子,應(yīng)該用firstly,而不是用first.第一句應(yīng)該是firstly and foremostly.
2.must 用在第一句不妥.應(yīng)該用have to.
3.think的用法錯誤.要否定提前.i don't think that you have mood to do anything.
4.from my stand point 有錯,應(yīng)該改為in my opinion 或者in my point即可.
5.where is a will...改為where there is a will,there is a way.
6.下一句應(yīng)該改為you should and you could get out from the tough（go through也可以）
7.第二段第一句,主語從句缺少主語,應(yīng)該改為what i can do now.主句也有問題.全句應(yīng)該改為：what i can do now is to give you some suggestions and i hope it would help you.
8.第二段第二句,沒有at the first place 的說法,應(yīng)該是firstly 或者at first.
9.say 后面為賓語從句,不能用it引導(dǎo).應(yīng)該用that.應(yīng)該改為I have to say that again that you should cheer up and be confident.其實這里顯得非常累贅.直接用i think you should cheer up and be confident即可.
10.at the second place 改為secondly.(與前面對應(yīng)）
11.建議別人不能用must,應(yīng)該用should.
13.correct the reason不搭配.直接用make some changes即可.
14.imformation是不可數(shù)名詞,應(yīng)該用is搭配.如果連上后面的advice應(yīng)該改為：there is also much imformation and advices on/about how to succeed in your career.這里應(yīng)該用就近原則.be動詞跟前面的information不跟后面的advices.
15.i will do anything i can不妥,應(yīng)該用i will do everything i can.而且whenever you need my hand太羅唆,直接用anytime在后面即可.即為：i will do everything i can to support you,any time.
16.最后一句,best wishes to you,from your best friend.再加姓名.
總的來說,這篇文章完全是中文思維寫好后翻譯過去的,不是從英文的角度去思考的.所以,很多中式英語.語句不通順.希望能改進(jìn).
高手幫我批改一下作文（六級的）
高手幫我批改一下作文（六級的）
a letter to a laid-off acquaintance
正文如下：
Dear Wing,
First and foremost,I must say that I'm so sorry to hear that you have been laid-off.I think you must be in no moo to do anything now.However,as I see it from my stand point,the situation is not too bad to deal with.You should remember an old saying:Where is a will,where is a way.you undoubtedly go through this tough time if you keep this faith.
Now all I can do is to give your some suggestions and hope that it will be useful for you.At the first place,I have to say it again that you must cheer up and be sonfident.At the second place,you have to find out the reason why you have been fired and correct it.For example,if your boss fired you due to your laziness,you must work harder and devote yourself to your job from now on.Finally,you can search a job on the Internet which fits you.Besides,there are also much imformation and advice about how to successed in your career.
Sincerely,I hope you can have a better job sas soon as possible.whenever you need my hand,I'll do anything I can to support you.Call me anytime you need.
Best wishes your best friend
沒錯的不要復(fù)制粘貼,只要改有錯的,免得看得眼花~.
a letter to a laid-off acquaintance
正文如下：
Dear Wing,
First and foremost,I must say that I'm so sorry to hear that you have been laid-off.I think you must be in no moo to do anything now.However,as I see it from my stand point,the situation is not too bad to deal with.You should remember an old saying:Where is a will,where is a way.you undoubtedly go through this tough time if you keep this faith.
Now all I can do is to give your some suggestions and hope that it will be useful for you.At the first place,I have to say it again that you must cheer up and be sonfident.At the second place,you have to find out the reason why you have been fired and correct it.For example,if your boss fired you due to your laziness,you must work harder and devote yourself to your job from now on.Finally,you can search a job on the Internet which fits you.Besides,there are also much imformation and advice about how to successed in your career.
Sincerely,I hope you can have a better job sas soon as possible.whenever you need my hand,I'll do anything I can to support you.Call me anytime you need.
Best wishes your best friend
沒錯的不要復(fù)制粘貼,只要改有錯的,免得看得眼花~.
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