In the present age,is parents or teachers are responsible for teaching children have sparked debates.This essay will discusse both sides of the issue.
Some people tend to think that parents is the best guide in children`s life.this view may be based on the fact that parenting have more influence on children than schooling.It is reasonable because children mostly have lived with their parents for a long time before entering school.Therefore ,let children know how to show their respects to elder people and obey the rules of society is widely be considered as the responsibility of parents.
On the other side of the debate,many individuals argue that parents might not always have the positive effects on children ,thus they consider that school should play a main role in cultivating children.They claim that they have confidence in bringing the children up to be talents.because school have good educational facilities,excellent teachers and sound educational system.
in conclusion,both of the schooling and parenting are important to children.So,for cultivating them to be talent,we should pay more attention to them and give them the decent education.
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