The glad day
Today is Sunday.We have a party in the garden.My grandparents and parents are the here.Look!This is my brother and this is my sister,These chirdren are my classmate.Tom is my best friend.
Those are our foods.That's a bottle of juice .That is a loaf of bread.Those are fruits.I like them very much
What are these?
Oh,they're flowers and toys.
We are enjoy ourselves on this Sunday
感覺(jué)時(shí)態(tài)上有些混亂,如果描述的是已經(jīng)過(guò)去的事情要用過(guò)去時(shí).可是里面還有人物介紹.所以看起來(lái)好像正在發(fā)生.
建議都用過(guò)去時(shí).
Today is Sunday.We had a party in the garden.There were lots of people,my grandparents,my parents,my brother and this is my sister.My classmates were also here today.Tom is one of them,and he is my best friend.
We had many foods such as a bottle of juice,a loaf of bread and fruits.I like them very much
We also had many flowers and toys.
We were enjoy ourselves today.
班門弄斧了,