There is a fine(old比較好,沒有fine tradition一說) tradition that the young should respect（pay respect to比單一的respect要好） the elder（the elderly） in China（in China最好掉到old tradition后,這樣比較順）.The tradition continues until now（這一整句改成This moral has been preserved until now更好）.But with the fast（rapid） development of the society,some young people have no time to show their respect to（show respct for或者pay respect to） their parents.Young people have their own social circles,and there are different ways of life from their parents.（這一句改為：As the young have their own social circles,their life can be very different from their parents'） They prefer going out for（改為on）a holiday to living together with their parents（整句改為They preferto going out on holidays than staying together with their family.prefer doing to doing sth是對的但不常用）.I think young people need their own life and（改為but） they shouldn’t ignore their parents’ life the same（the same改為as well,整句話是個人觀點,宜放在最前面或者最后總結(jié),不應(yīng)在此插入）.Nowadays young people need to（need to 改為are forced to,不是他們自己愿意face的） face（the） intense（intensive,不是intense） competition,（And,此處少連詞）they need to（have to,理由同上） make more money to support their family.As a result,they have to make a difficult choice between playing out of doors and caring for their parents on holidays（這句話是典型的Chinguish,改為：As a result,they have to get trapped in a dilemna between their social life and family relations）.Caring for parents is obligatory,but I think young people should help their parents to look for their own life(這句整句話是什么意思?我沒看懂).There is a eneration（這個不算generation gap吧?直接改為There lies a huge gap between...） gap between young people and their parents—different tastes,(distinctive) hobbies,(insimilar)ideas and so on.Young people don’t want to change their life-style(中間沒有連字符) and s