幫我修改一下我的英語(yǔ)短文~擴(kuò)充點(diǎn)內(nèi)容,最好能朗讀時(shí)讀到3分鐘多一點(diǎn)就ok了~
Security is my top concern
Hello,everyone ,My name is Philip and I’m from the major of finance investment.Today I’m honored to share my opinion “security is my top concern” with you.
As we all known,with the development of society,private car is no longer a luxurious thing for ordinary people.More and more people drive to work instead of going by bus.It is very convenient and time-saving .You can drive your own car to the workplace instead of waiting for the crowded bus and afraid of being late for working.But at the same time the security problem is more and more close to our life.We always hear many tragic accidents happen around us.We have to admit that life is quite fragile in nowadays.More and more people died in some unnatural causes such as the accident.還有一段放不下了。反正大意就是在杭州發(fā)生了一場(chǎng)慘劇，一個(gè)精神有點(diǎn)問(wèn)題的男人砍死砍傷了一些小學(xué)生，政府采取了措施，但人死不能復(fù)生。所以我們要提前做好防護(hù)措施。
如果全改改的好的話也行~