這里必須改成these,因?yàn)榍懊媪_列了多種情況,屬于復(fù)數(shù)概念,this是單數(shù).
 
此外,本文有些小錯(cuò)誤,稍作改動(dòng)：
College students have a 【lot of】 ways to pay their college fees.Many students have their parents to pay the fees.Some students may apply 【for】【bank loans】 and others will try to find part-time jobs 【on and off campus】.Apart from 【these】,many good 【students】 can ...
a little 只能用于不可數(shù)名詞,way是可數(shù)名詞,復(fù)數(shù)應(yīng)改為a lot of 或者many;
申請(qǐng)的詞組應(yīng)與介詞for搭配；
用復(fù)數(shù)loans較好,因?yàn)橘J款會(huì)多次申請(qǐng),且通常為多筆分別發(fā)放；
介詞錯(cuò)誤,校內(nèi)應(yīng)為on campus,校外應(yīng)為off campus；
不再贅述；
many應(yīng)與復(fù)數(shù)搭配.