你好這位朋友,感謝你的信任,你的求助我已經(jīng)收到了.解答如下：
increasingly --> increasing：正確.increasing本身就是形容詞,用來修飾number,加上ly是不行的,因?yàn)楦痹~不能修飾名詞
As引導(dǎo)的是從句,在第一個(gè)逗號(hào)之前,都是這個(gè)從句的領(lǐng)地.在這個(gè)領(lǐng)地內(nèi),需要屬于從句自己的動(dòng)詞.修改如下,請(qǐng)看大寫：As an increasing number of people ARE moving into
city前需要加定冠詞THE,jobs已經(jīng)有了s是復(fù)數(shù)泛指所有的工作崗位,不需要定冠詞.city之所以需要THE是因?yàn)樾枰刂改切┱夜ぷ鞯娜说男履康牡?
big cities are后面有三種說法行得通,你可以選其一：
1 - big cities are FACED WITH large pressure
2 - big cities ARE FACING large pressure
3 - big cities FACE large pressure
第二句開頭是固定用法：On THE other hand,這里的定冠詞不可省略,特指事情的另一面,表示轉(zhuǎn)折.
逗號(hào)后面語意紊亂,需要稍作修改.接下來我把兩句話統(tǒng)一幫你修改和改進(jìn)之后如下,請(qǐng)注意比對(duì)：
As an increasing number of people are moving into the city for jobs, big cities are facing GREATER* pressure. On the other hand, companies are offering inadequte positions to meet these job seekers' needs in middle-small sized cities.
*處注這里我用了greater這個(gè)比較級(jí),和之前的increasing更加呼應(yīng).
希望對(duì)你有幫助:-)