高手幫我修改下這份簡(jiǎn)歷（語(yǔ)法.詞匯.格式方面的錯(cuò)誤）
Resume
Personal Information
Name:****
Gender:MALE
Date of Birth:1986/10/24
Residency:Shanghai
Work Experience:Student
Hukou:SHANGHAI
Address:****
Zip Code:
Self Assessment
Out-going,enthusiastic about learning,responsible and creative,finds satisfaction and pleasure in teamwork,able to communicate with supervisors and staff.
Career Objective
Type of Employment:Intern/Trainee
Desired Location:Shanghai
Desired Salary:Negotiable /Month
Desired Position:Intern
Work Experience
2007/07--2007/09：Shanghai High quality Family education Company
Industry:Education/Training
Family education Tutor
Summer arranges the family by the company to carry on the family education
2006/07--2006/09：Common people work place （Shanghai）Cultural development Limited company
Industry:Furniture/Home Appliances/Arts & Craft/Toys
Sales Regional Sales Manager
As company commercial representative,the independence organizes the personnel to complete the company in Songjiang District area present sale duty.sended the placard through on-line forum,sent ways and so on circular to seek for 3 schoolmates to sell together.Summer vacation 2 months through visit to sell obtain certain achievement .
Education
2005/09--Present DongHua University Macromolecule Materials Engineering Bachelor
Material Science and Engineering specialty including polymer chemistry,High polymer physics ,The chemical principle and so on a series and chemistry chemical industry related curriculum .
Extra-curriculars
2006/08--2007/09 Director-General of the Ministry of student life Leadership Position
Minister of personnel to complete the task,while he was organizing school students to participate in the fruits height match competition bedroom outstanding selection,and other activities,better impact.
Language Skills
English GOOD
（我對(duì)自己的英文水平不是很信任,所以再此請(qǐng)求高手的指導(dǎo),簡(jiǎn)歷中有什么語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤,或者哪些地方不符合簡(jiǎn)歷的要求的請(qǐng)多多指出,幫幫我提出一點(diǎn)修正,）