My mother is a nice person.she always make me feel （happiness……h(huán)appy.hapiness是名詞,feel后應(yīng)該接形容詞）. I have two （mother加S因為是復(fù)數(shù)）. One mother （she刪掉） lives in Los Angeles. she is my stepmother. she always （make……making) me feel bad. I (have……did) not liked her since I met her. (Right 去掉吧）now I live with her. Another mother (she刪掉）（ live加S） in China now. I （bore……wan born in Guangdong of China.（from……when) I was a child I lived with her. (Each……every） time（when)I wacth my mother and I in the picture I cry, because my mother (make ……gave)me a lot of recollection. When I was a child my mother taught me (much thing……many things) and (cared me a lot……took care of me carefully). I will always remember my mother
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