第一段 I like automobiles.Automobiles are the fastest one of the civil products since the invention of the traffic tools.
錯誤分析：
1.the fastest one of the civil products 應該為 one of the fastest civil products
第二段 It provides people with comfortable driving condition because of its superior functions.It also satisfies different requirements of various kinds of people due to its constantly appearence designs.It owns the day to day safety assurance system,which reduces the unsafety that high speed driving could brings as far as possible.It has successfully been the indispensable part of people's lives in modern society.
錯誤分析：
2.It provides people with comfortable driving condition because of its superior functions 要么用代詞 they provide people with …because of their superior functions 呼應上文,要么改為 an automobile provides people with … because of its superior functions.
3.后面的 和 its 按照第二條意見逐一改動,同時要注意其他名詞與所用主語的數(shù)的一致,如 It satisfies … due to its constantly appearence design 或者 they satisfy … due to their constantly appearence designs
4.could brings as far as possible 情態(tài)動詞 could 后要用動詞原形 bring
第三段 However,the negative effect that it produced has been continuouslly taking on as one of the reasons that the vehicles commoditization causes the global warming.The number of people died and hurt in annual traffic accidents has been gradually increasing.In China,one person dies in the traffic accidents every five minutes.One person can be hurted in the traffic accidents every one minute.More and more automobiles have caused the traffic jams in every cities.These are the unavoidable drawbacks that automobiles bring us convience at the same time.
錯誤分析：
5.the vehicles commoditization 改為 the commoditization of vehicles 比較符合語法.
6.one person dies in the traffic accidents every five minutes 中 one person 泛指某一個人,如果改為 There is one person dying in the traffic accidents every five minutes 就合理了.同理,有一句話也應該如此處理,或者改為與前一舉并列 and one person being able to be hurted in the traffic accidents every one minute.
7.These are the unavoidable drawbacks 中的 the 應該刪除.
第四段 If people obey the traffic rules strictly ,drive safely and take public transportation as much as possible,the negtive effects can be reduced to the lowest point.
錯誤分析：
8.take public transportation 用 take 表示“乘坐”應該跟具體名詞,此處可以改為 take public vehicles,或者把動詞換為 go,后面用 by means of public transportation.
第五段 We can not stop the progress of modern technologies but can avoid the harmfulness that it can bring.In this way,we can still enjoy automobiles.