樓主以下是你的分和依據(jù)
分:6.0或6.5
依據(jù):文章總體來說觀點清晰,句式通暢,對題目的要求理解正確.但是觀點還不夠深入,個別地方用詞不當,還有一些微小的語法錯誤,對于各方觀點沒有進行深入剖析,思想不夠深刻.
雅思作文評分,只求分數(shù)及依據(jù),不用具體的修改建議.
雅思作文評分,只求分數(shù)及依據(jù),不用具體的修改建議.
迫切想知道自己的水平究竟是怎樣,因為之前沒有參加過考試.跪謝.
題目:
Somepeople think that parents should teach children how to be good members ofsociety. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discussthese views and give your own opinion.
正文:
Nowadays, how to educate children to begood members of society is a hot issue among people. There is a greatcontroversy over whether children should be taught by their parents or beeducated in schools. Both views will be discussed below.
Children educated by their parents may havea good understanding of how to become a good member of society. Because mostparents themselves who are able and willing to teach their children are goodmembers of society. So children can imitate their parents’ behaviours. For example,they can learn how to behave well in different situations, what to say invarious conversations, and how to address themselves decently in all sorts ofvenues.
On the other hand, schools are places thatdesigned for educating children. There are good facilities, experienced teachersand good social environments in schools, such facts are helpful to children’sdevelopment. By contrast, children who are educated by their parents at homemay not have access to a suitable social environment in which they can makefriends with other children and develop their soft skills.
In my opinion, both parents and schools shouldmake effort to make children become valuable members of society. At home,parents educate children to do things moderate, while in schools, teachersteach children academic knowledge as well as the rules of society. Under sucheducation, children are more likely to become decent members of society.
To sum up, parents as well as schools havethe responsibility to teach children how to be good members of society.
呃,有很多空格被度娘吃了,因為說什么超過字數(shù)限制什么的.關于空格的問題請無視之
迫切想知道自己的水平究竟是怎樣,因為之前沒有參加過考試.跪謝.
題目:
Somepeople think that parents should teach children how to be good members ofsociety. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discussthese views and give your own opinion.
正文:
Nowadays, how to educate children to begood members of society is a hot issue among people. There is a greatcontroversy over whether children should be taught by their parents or beeducated in schools. Both views will be discussed below.
Children educated by their parents may havea good understanding of how to become a good member of society. Because mostparents themselves who are able and willing to teach their children are goodmembers of society. So children can imitate their parents’ behaviours. For example,they can learn how to behave well in different situations, what to say invarious conversations, and how to address themselves decently in all sorts ofvenues.
On the other hand, schools are places thatdesigned for educating children. There are good facilities, experienced teachersand good social environments in schools, such facts are helpful to children’sdevelopment. By contrast, children who are educated by their parents at homemay not have access to a suitable social environment in which they can makefriends with other children and develop their soft skills.
In my opinion, both parents and schools shouldmake effort to make children become valuable members of society. At home,parents educate children to do things moderate, while in schools, teachersteach children academic knowledge as well as the rules of society. Under sucheducation, children are more likely to become decent members of society.
To sum up, parents as well as schools havethe responsibility to teach children how to be good members of society.
呃,有很多空格被度娘吃了,因為說什么超過字數(shù)限制什么的.關于空格的問題請無視之
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