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There is nothing wrong with the universities if they accept the same amount of male and femde students in every subject,To study with indivduals should have the same rigth to receive education . whether the subject has proved to be more suitable for male or female.
這里用To start with,稍顯生硬,模仿痕跡太重.推薦換from an enlightened standpoint等萬(wàn)能句鋪墊
For instance ,the cmceqnences form some well-known,research suggests that men are good at sciences and angineering while arts are approprite for women .what I mean is that becavse of the genetic factors .male students are more efficient to go further study in terms of sciences and engineering ,where as females students may have a more brigher future provided that they take arts as their major courses.
這兩句作為主題段支持句,意思重復(fù)
雅思作文,請(qǐng)大家?guī)兔纯茨苡袔追?
雅思作文,請(qǐng)大家?guī)兔纯茨苡袔追?
可能打進(jìn)電腦時(shí)有些單詞打錯(cuò)了
topic:whether the universities should accept the equal number of male and female students in every subjuect
In contemporary society gerder equailty has become recently increasingly.significant A controversial issue that is heatedly debated is whether the university should accept the same number of male and femde shderts in every subject As far as I’m concemed the universities should take the difference between male’s aptitude and femde’s aptitude towards a variety of subject as a cinsideration .
There is nothing wrong with the universities if they accept the same amount of male and femde students in every subject,To study with indivduals should have the same rigth to receive education .whether the subject has proved to be more suitable for male or female.Moveover,in this day and age,the former balone of jobs which are for males only .avaliable for females now It is evident that there is a definite link between emplayment and university edvcation Therefore,every subject in university should be opened to males and female student fairly.
However,the reality that there are abvius clistictions between males and femles should be counted So the universities still need to consider which subjects fit males nell,and which is suitable for females,For instance ,the cmceqnences form some well-known,research suggests that men are good at sciences and angineering while arts are approprite for women .what I mean is that becavse of the genetic factors .male students are more efficient to go further study in terms of sciences and engineering ,where as females students may have a more brigher future provided that they take arts as their major courses.Further more ,there are still many jobs that needs a specfic gender Take nurse as an example,it is obvious that women are more likely to get this work.So the universties also should accept more female students in nursing major in order to adapt to the reality .
In conclusion the universties nowadays need to have some changes to adapt to the new era.But the gender equality in every subjects is difficuld and unpractical to achieve.
可能打進(jìn)電腦時(shí)有些單詞打錯(cuò)了
topic:whether the universities should accept the equal number of male and female students in every subjuect
In contemporary society gerder equailty has become recently increasingly.significant A controversial issue that is heatedly debated is whether the university should accept the same number of male and femde shderts in every subject As far as I’m concemed the universities should take the difference between male’s aptitude and femde’s aptitude towards a variety of subject as a cinsideration .
There is nothing wrong with the universities if they accept the same amount of male and femde students in every subject,To study with indivduals should have the same rigth to receive education .whether the subject has proved to be more suitable for male or female.Moveover,in this day and age,the former balone of jobs which are for males only .avaliable for females now It is evident that there is a definite link between emplayment and university edvcation Therefore,every subject in university should be opened to males and female student fairly.
However,the reality that there are abvius clistictions between males and femles should be counted So the universities still need to consider which subjects fit males nell,and which is suitable for females,For instance ,the cmceqnences form some well-known,research suggests that men are good at sciences and angineering while arts are approprite for women .what I mean is that becavse of the genetic factors .male students are more efficient to go further study in terms of sciences and engineering ,where as females students may have a more brigher future provided that they take arts as their major courses.Further more ,there are still many jobs that needs a specfic gender Take nurse as an example,it is obvious that women are more likely to get this work.So the universties also should accept more female students in nursing major in order to adapt to the reality .
In conclusion the universties nowadays need to have some changes to adapt to the new era.But the gender equality in every subjects is difficuld and unpractical to achieve.
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