1.I hope this e-mail find you well.
我希望這封電子郵件好好找到你?這句話怪怪的,沒有人在信里這樣寫,所以最好去掉.
2.I am going to tell you that we are set to attend the 26th China International Furniture Fair (Guangzhou) from 3th to 6th Sept,2010.
I am goting to tell you that we are set...可以直接改成 We are about to attend the.
3.Please login the website www.ciff-gz.com to know more about the fair.
應該改成Please visit our website...for more information about the fair.
4.More than 10 kinds of new design chairs will be shown in our booth.
new design chairs?應該是newly designed chairs吧!
5.You are always welcome to our booth or to our factory at your earlier convenience if you have this visit plan for our record.
You are always welcome to visit our booth or our factory...后面的有些怪...我覺得你可以直接改成at a day that is convenience for you...英文里...不應該有太多information crammed in one sentence.
6.Ok,any inquiry to our product,please feel free to contact me.
Besides,if you have any inquiry to our products,please feel free to contact us.
7.最后的,就是have a nice day應該在best regards那句的前面.best regards應該是在最后說的.