Dear XX,
Thank you very much for your great hospitality and receiving during my stay in England in this summer vacation which might have brought you about inconveniences.Britain was so beautiful and the weather there was so good that I really enjoyed my trip.I hope to see you all again in the next summer vacation.
本段稍微在語句組織上有先后順序顛倒,中國人習慣是說打擾了不好意思,而外國人寫信是先表示感謝,所以我在譯的時候根據(jù)外國人的習慣,先表示了謝意,再略提了該暑假在英國的逗留可能給你們添麻煩了.另外,英國很漂亮、天氣很好先說,再說由于這兩個原因我真的過得很開心,并希望下次再見,是這么一個邏輯,特此說明.
By the way,Backy and I both observed the agreement.We didn't unpack your presents until we returned to China.Woo,what wonderful presents you sent to us - Harry Potter,such a wonderful series of books in English.Although there are lots of words that we can not comprehend at present,we will make efforts to read them.Thank you very much for the presents.
這一段翻譯基本忠于原文,邏輯與英文無多大差異.
Yours Sincerely,
XXX
最開始的稱呼后最后的署名還是一定需要的,這是一封書信不可或缺的要素.