幫忙改語法錯(cuò)誤 我的語法存在很大問題
The number of full-time students who try to
look for part-time jobs was increasing in the past few years.Some people say
it is detrimental for students’ focusing on learning,they insist that the only
responsibility for students is to learn more acknowledge.The objectors claim that part-time jobs are
beneficial for full-times students,attribute to being able to gather more
social experiences and earn more money.
As I see it,I support that full-time students ought to be permitted to
find some part time jobs,but there should be some preconditions as following:
First and foremost,some relatively poor students are really in need for
part-time jobs,because most of their family can’t afford their high expenses
in university,which means looking for some part-time jobs is the only way out
to finish their college life,after all,not every student could win particular
scholarship.
Secondly,although part-time jobs should be permitted,but there still
have some problems.
On one hand,part-time jobs definitely are
not allowed to influence students’ learning efficiency,which might be affect
their credits in school,no matter how,learning is still the first
responsibility of students.On the other hand,for instance,lately there is a
report that a female student had been raped when she was working,which told us
that most teenagers are lack of enough social experiences.So they need advices
from teachers and their parents.Besides,relative national law should also be established
so as to protect students.
As a whole,students deserve a chance for part-time jobs,but their
schools and parents and even our government should take some relevant measuresto protect these students.