這篇雅思作文 幾分?
之前考了三次作文都是5分 現(xiàn)在正在背8分萬能作文那本書 大家看看我的作文問題出在哪
Nowadays,a lot of charities and organizations have publicized their activities and a number of special days,like 'National Children's Day',for encouraging good care of children,and 'National Non-smoking Day',for encouraging person to pay more attention to health.Why do these organizations take these activities,and what will be the effect?
作文如下
Increasingly special days are now publicized by the charities and organizations.Because people are more concern about the quality of their lives than ever before and followed this trend,the organization have the responsibility to publicize a lot of special days which affect people’s lives such as the National Children’s Day and the National Non-Smoking Day.
However,some people argue that the special days evolve as a profit-making entity.Within this system,efforts to employ the charities activities and the special days for positive effect have always struggled to stay alive,nearly besieged by the overflow of commercial publicity.The real beneficiaries are the organizations instead of the public.
To my opinion,whether those special days will benefit us is mainly depended on ourselves.The organizations are just an extension of human behaviour,if people attract no attention to their health,their children or their parents,any kinds of special days are useless.For instance,most parents have to work everyday with no attention to their children.While on the National Children’s Day,they realized that they have the responsibility to care about their children.But after that special day,they back to work and again without any awareness of their children.
The special days have some active effect,and indeed,I respect the aims of the charities and the organizations to publicize the special days,I do not believe it is the only way to encourage people,in fact,to make these special days more effective,human behaviour is the key.
寫的時候想法倒是有 就是寫不出來啊 于是選擇背范文
背了范圍之后自己的想法就沒了 總想把背過的句子用上 還容易跑題 觀點不明確
咋整啊 還有一個月考試 作文得要6分 求一些短期的提高方法 看了一樓說的 不準備繼續(xù)死記硬背了 不知每天寫一篇是否可以啊？
覺得一樓的回答不錯
所以我另外開了一個提問