My hero is a doctor,who save(改為saved) my life when I could have died.
In fact,she(改為he,根據下文,此醫(yī)生是男滴.) has saved quite a few children's lives.
At the age of five,I was serious(改為seriously) ill and my life was in danger.
My parents were all(改為both,指“兩者都”.all指“三者或三者以上都”) worried if I could recover from the disease.
I was lucky enough to meet Dr.Jack,a great doctor,who is always east to talk.
He did lots of different tests to find (加上out,表示“找出”.為了找出救我的藥,做了各種測試.find強調結果,指已經發(fā)現(xiàn)了的.) the medicine to cure me.
I owe to him that I am still alive.
Dr.Jack,he(改為who) has made a big difference to the lives of others,is respected by many people in our city.