Old buildings occupy a large space in some long-historical countries.It represents the culture and lifestyle of a nation.Some people support to protect these old buildings in order to remembering (應該remember) our ancestors and strengthening (應該strengthen) cultural diversity of the communities.Otherwise (otherwise用錯了,應用on the other hand/side),some people （加are）against it because the old buildings have influenced the development of the urban sprawl.In my point of view,the existence of the old buildings has more advantages than disadvantages.
- 開篇觀點明確.用詞還好,少數語法錯誤,第一印象為6分以上,7.5以下）
Old buildings are the special symbol of an area.People are reminded by those buildings to know their fantastic culture.Likewise,old buildings have their researchable values and architectural values.The designers in modern socity （拼錯了society）can learn from those great buildings to build some functional and fabulous modern buildings.As well as the historian (as well as用錯了,用additionally吧),they can get more information about the lifestyles and the comment of their lives.
- 第二段也寫得不錯.個別詞法錯誤,但是總體不影響理解.看來是6.5-7.5的水平,繼續(xù)看.
Furthermore,old buildings can make a great contribution to the tourism industry.For instance,some people are interested in the Great Wall,some are curious about the Big Ben,others may think the Summer Palace Museum is perfect.Thus,they will travel to some places which have their favourite old buildings.Obviously,the increasing number of tourist owe to the old buildings （這句話語法沒錯,也好理解,但是native speakers不會這么說）.They attract many travellers to appreciate the old-fashioned buildings.The government make a large number of money from the old buildings indiectly （拼錯了）.Therefore,it is no doubt that we should not destory （拼錯了）these old buildings.On the contrary,we should put more money into the old building protection.
- 還是有拼寫錯誤.語句總體來說沒有太多毛病,但是句法詞法使用偏于單調,不夠豐富.不到7.5的水平.
To sum up,old buildings are regarded as the most precious things for the nations.We should be proud of the old buildings,because they proves the great history of the human beings.
- 最后評分：6.5-7分.運氣好,7分,運氣不好,6.5分,但是明顯高于6分的水平.
- 你的邏輯、文章組織都沒有多大的問題.背些樣句套話,還有用些正式些的詞語,很快就能提高整體書平了.比如invest in maintenance of traditional architecture 和put more money into the old building protection就是兩個檔次的文字水平.
- 再接再厲!