語法錯(cuò)誤先不考慮的話,文章中關(guān)于希望禁煙的理由,沒有能夠非常有條理的說清楚,部分原因不合邏輯.不好意思比較直接點(diǎn)出來,因?yàn)槿种木渥佣夹枰M(jìn)行部分改動,你是不是想表達(dá)下面的意思：
1、抽煙浪費(fèi)錢,有害健康,舉例：哮喘病人、降低患心血管類疾病概率
2、抽煙的人有口臭,影響交際.舉例：不喜歡靠近抽煙的人,身上有怪味.
結(jié)論：希望禁煙那你重新修改下= =我改就等于幫你重新寫了……

《Smoking should be banned in all public areas》


I strongly agreed that smoking should be banned in public areas. Here are my reasons.

First of all, smoking is a waste of money, and harm to our health. people with asthma will have a bigger chance to get worse if they are frequently exposed to second hand smoke.

Also, smoking people aremore likely to suffer from heart-related illnesses, which is verified by many scientific evidence now.

Secondly, long term smokers often have stink breath. No one likes stink people. For example, most of the friends I know do not like to be friends with people who always has a cigarette on the mouth. Everytime I walk by smoking people, I could always smell his bad breath, which is really annoying.

So I wish smoking could be banned in the public and we can live in a free-second-hand-smoke world.

我寫得好累，再也不答作文題了……還不見得寫得好……嗯。就你了，O(∩_∩)O謝謝