I should bear in mind forever the old saying,"Don't judge a book by its cover.",of which I awared in a story between me and a classmate.Xiao Li,a newcomer in my class,was only about one point three metres tall.And he was the person I looked down upon due to the appearance,once I even laughed at him,"You look ridiculous." However,I soon realized that I was wrong.But he responded without a word.Later,at the festival celebrating party,after when I was on duty for cleaning the classroom,he did something,because I left the classroom with the ground full of garbage.
But I did not realized that I had totally forgotten my duty until the next day when I entered the classroom,astonished----the classroom was so clean!And just when I was wondering about this,my deskmate told me that it was XiaoLi who cleaned the classroom.All of a sudden,a feeling of shame stroke me.I've never thought taht XiaoLi was so kind a person,while me so bad.It was just after this story,I had kept the saying in mind,"Don't judge a person by his appearance.'
的確不貫,而且還有用詞不當?shù)牡胤?關(guān)于連貫的問題你對照一下,我在文中是加了一些詞和句子以銜接的,在這里我就指出一些你用詞上的不當之處：
1、表達這個同學(xué)的身高,不過high的,身高的表達是用tall.舉個很簡單的反例,當你表達一架飛機有 xx high時（xx為高度）,你能區(qū)別出指的是飛機的高度還是它起飛后離地的高度呢?
2、慶祝節(jié)日的聚會不需要將首字母大寫的,除非是特定的節(jié)日,比如“春節(jié)”(Spring Festival)、“國慶節(jié)”(National Day)等才用大寫.
3、最后一句話,”Don’t judge a person by its appearance.”對于人怎么可以用“it”?“it”是表達“它”,有表達“人”的時候會用“它”的嗎?