1、這是敘述過去的事件,而且有準(zhǔn)確的時間,因此全文的基本時態(tài)確定為一般過去時.用一般現(xiàn)在時不合適.
2、return 是動詞,前面已經(jīng)有了take a bus所以這里連續(xù)用動詞是錯誤的,改為back home,這里沒必要加our.
3、noodle一般用復(fù)數(shù)形式,改為noodles.
4、午餐是lunch,dinner改為lunch,和早餐晚餐保持一致.
改后全文：
On Sunday,I usually got up at 7:00.Then I
washed my face and brushed my teeth.After I had breakfast,I went shopping
with my mother.We went to the supermarket by bus.We bought some vegetables
and took a bus back home.We had noodles for lunch.After lunch,I slept
for a little while.Then I did my homework from 14:00 to 17:00.After supper,I
watched TV or read some books.I went to bed at 21:00.It’s my Sunday.