文章中心明確,論點(diǎn)很清晰,論據(jù)也比較清楚有力.另外,作者的基本功不錯(cuò),文章中沒有什么太多的語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤.而且筆者在文中多出使用連接詞,使整篇文章都顯得很自然,銜接的很好.目前得分:6.5分.
但是注意一些小問題:1 第一句 become 后面為什么要接to呢?
2 注意一些詞中間要加連字符 如over-exploit fast-pace等
在注意一些細(xì)節(jié)問題 文章會(huì)更好的!
雅思作文修改,誰好心給我改改吧.
雅思作文修改,誰好心給我改改吧.
Q
Most of us believe it is important to protect the environment but few of us make efforts to achieve this goal.What are the causes of this phenomenon and what are your solutions.
A
Nowadays,the continuously increasing environmental degradation has become to a critical issue in modern society.Although the problem is already noticed by the public,there are still few actions taken by people.In this essay,I will analyse some possible causes of this phenomenon and the corresponding solutions.
First of all,compare to previous age,people have a higher living standard as a result of new technology development.On the other hand,people over exploit natural resources and make the environmental problem aggravated.Even though people start to know protecting environment is everyone’s duty,the conflict still exists.Whether people should sacrifice the environmental resources or their enjoyment has become to a struggling decision for them.Secondly,it is a fast pace society today and everyone is busy with their life.The huge competitions in different industries and relatively high unemployment rate are the cases in point.Therefore people have less time to care about remote future environment problem.In other words,they need to look after the surviving problems which may directly influence their life now.Moreover,people might find it is quite difficult for them to take actions to protect the environment as they short of general knowledge about it.For instance,people may not even know they are using too many plastic bags and stop using them is one of the things they can do to save the environment.
Accordingly,the solutions could be the following.To begin with,governments should set the regulations to control the situation.For example,people go shopping in the supermarket in China have to either bring their own bag to carry the goods or pay for the every single plastic bag.It is a really effective control to the whitepollution.After that,the media plays a key role in terms of general environmental protecting education.TV and radio programs can be utilised to proliferate the general ideas about saving environment.Finally,voluntary associations should be organized and people should be encouraged to join them as well.
Overall,the causes of this phenomenon are various and complex.However,if the public and the governments work together,I believe the situation can be improved tremendously.
Q
Most of us believe it is important to protect the environment but few of us make efforts to achieve this goal.What are the causes of this phenomenon and what are your solutions.
A
Nowadays,the continuously increasing environmental degradation has become to a critical issue in modern society.Although the problem is already noticed by the public,there are still few actions taken by people.In this essay,I will analyse some possible causes of this phenomenon and the corresponding solutions.
First of all,compare to previous age,people have a higher living standard as a result of new technology development.On the other hand,people over exploit natural resources and make the environmental problem aggravated.Even though people start to know protecting environment is everyone’s duty,the conflict still exists.Whether people should sacrifice the environmental resources or their enjoyment has become to a struggling decision for them.Secondly,it is a fast pace society today and everyone is busy with their life.The huge competitions in different industries and relatively high unemployment rate are the cases in point.Therefore people have less time to care about remote future environment problem.In other words,they need to look after the surviving problems which may directly influence their life now.Moreover,people might find it is quite difficult for them to take actions to protect the environment as they short of general knowledge about it.For instance,people may not even know they are using too many plastic bags and stop using them is one of the things they can do to save the environment.
Accordingly,the solutions could be the following.To begin with,governments should set the regulations to control the situation.For example,people go shopping in the supermarket in China have to either bring their own bag to carry the goods or pay for the every single plastic bag.It is a really effective control to the whitepollution.After that,the media plays a key role in terms of general environmental protecting education.TV and radio programs can be utilised to proliferate the general ideas about saving environment.Finally,voluntary associations should be organized and people should be encouraged to join them as well.
Overall,the causes of this phenomenon are various and complex.However,if the public and the governments work together,I believe the situation can be improved tremendously.
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