Red Cross Society of China is a unitary Red Cross organization of the People's Republic of China ,【which is加上最好,句子顯得更緊湊,更高檔】 a social relief and aid society that engages in humanitarian work.It is the largest charity in modern Chinese history.The 【organization主語(yǔ),單數(shù)】 always 【help——helps 單三式,與前面主語(yǔ)一致】 those 【people 可省去,those可以直接表人,做先行詞】【,去掉】who require assistance 【and 加】【given——gives,與helps并列】 hope and love to them .
But 【recently現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)】,the organization 【came ——has come】under fire after a woman named Guo Meimei,who 【claims——claimed】 to be affiliated with the society【and】posted photos of her lavish lifestyle to her blog .People in online communities speculated that her extravagant purchases may have been funded by money embezzled from the RCSC.Although the organization has now made an attempt to publicize related information online,it is still being criticized for being confusing and unreliable.People were infuriated at the time and said 【the后面有定語(yǔ)從句修飾,表特指】money they had donated should have been used to help those in need.
So,I think the Charity system in China needs reform and supervision to regain public's trust and 【make it】return to a healthy track【in order to】establish a transparent,fair and green charity mechanism.
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