題目是目前很多發(fā)展中國家都在expand their tourism industry.請說明理由.并評論這個(gè)現(xiàn)象positive or not.
作文
In contemporary age and society,many developing countries are //exploiting at a large spectrum of //用法有問題their tourism attractions//可以去掉spectrum那個(gè)錯(cuò)誤的詞組,在句尾加 to the full.There is/are a considerable number of tourism/tourist resources in some developing countries,such as sunshine and beaches in Malaysia.As more and more countries pay their attention on/to the tourism industry and actively expand it,tourism income //contributes a heavy/high percentage//搭配很別扭,take up.in...to their GNPs.This phenomenon is attribute/d to several reasons/整句寫法別扭,可改為.is mainly attributed to the following reasons.
The most manifest and significant reason for the /tourist expansion is that the tourism affects /directly on/刪 the economy/ies 注意單復(fù)數(shù) of the countries /directly.With the/刪 gradually/gradual這里需要的是形容詞 perfection of global transporting/刪ing conditions and the/刪 constant construction of the /刪 學(xué)會(huì)冠詞的用法很重要 其實(shí)很難 主要靠長期閱讀積累local infrastructure,massive//用這個(gè)詞來形容人很好笑,不是多是巨大粗大的意思 foreign tourists travel abroad to enjoy their vacations.They stay in the/刪 local hotels and consume commodities; thus,the local tourism revenue ascends/這個(gè)詞沒錯(cuò),用的很怪,你見過有老外這樣用過?收入增長用increase grow go up rise都可以 and the economy progress//?這個(gè)progress是動(dòng)詞還是名詞?as well.The mechanism /plays exactly in the governments’ hands/完全沒有這樣的搭配用法.Besides,as is well-known,it needs numerous manual labors to fulfill its demand as the tourism industry is classified to/as介詞搭配也很重要 the Third Industry/第三產(chǎn)業(yè)英文是tertiary industry ,which mainly offers services.This,to the governments’ satisfaction,alleviate the /high incidence of unemployment.Farther speaking,it helps stabilize the society.What’s more,most of the tourism projects are eco-friendly(that is precisely the reason why it is called green economy.) and low-cost.Therefore,for many developing countries which are afflicted with financial problems,the expanding/expansion is painless and productive.
However,everything should be controlled /in a limited boundary/還是搭配的問題.should be under strict control.Overly/這是個(gè)副詞 over expansion results in disasters.In spite of the above-mentioned advantages,the undue exploit/exploitation and development has grave detrimental impact on the/刪 environment.Some tourism spots are under poor administration.The misbehaver/misbehaviors of the tourists are not held out//你用這個(gè)詞組想說什么?是stop之類的意思么?in time,which may lead to the deteriorate/這是個(gè)動(dòng)詞 of the/刪 local ecosystem.For instance,there was once a horrible forest fire in the Great Mountain//這是哪里?in Northern China caused by a tourist who threw his lighting/lighted cigarette//to ./without putting it out/刪,多余.The tragedy is well/還是搭配不對very/quite/highly likely to happen again if the/刪 managers pay insufficient attention to necessary scrutiny//完全是胡亂的搭配,結(jié)果就是讓稍有水平的讀者讀起來如鯁在喉別扭至極.More worryingly,some developing countries expand the natural resources at random instead of planning carefully ahead /of time according to the/刪 environment condition.It is absolutely stupid and short-sighted.
In a/刪 conclusion,therefore,the tourism industry benefits the less developed countries,but the authorities must make a long-term plan and get a clear perspective on the current situation so that they could expand/exploit the precious resources in harmony/harmonious ways.
399個(gè)單詞.
得分約在5分左右.
一篇文章其實(shí)是最能反映一個(gè)人的語言水平的.這篇文給人的感覺是滿目瘡痍,東拼西湊,詞不達(dá)意.雖然試圖堆積辭藻,但畢竟水平有限,英語又很講求搭配和用法的嚴(yán)謹(jǐn),所以縱使大詞猛句卻難得高分.另外雅思大作文250詞,最好精益求精,多寫不會(huì)多得分,反會(huì)加大失分概率.
作者現(xiàn)在最需要做的不是大量的寫,而是多看英語原版雜志如economist,business weekly 等等,或者上網(wǎng)看英語國家的門戶網(wǎng)站如yahoo.com等等,多多積累些語言素材先,杜甫 說讀書破萬卷,下筆如有神,用在雅思寫作上也是同個(gè)道理.
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