這個你要自己先做一下,讓我替你檢查檢查好不?要不然,你父母會罵我們的.檢查檢查好不Summer vocation was coming! Jenny's parents had promised Jenny that they would take her to Beijing for the vocation. So, now, they were on the train to Beijing from Guangzhou. Jenny looked out of the window, enjoying big trees, buildings, green hills and rivers. About half an hour later,they began to read newpapers and books for fun, and once ina while, they played cards with other passengers. At noon, they had milk, bread and sandwiches for lunch. At 6 pm , they arrived at Beijing Station .很不錯！我基本上沒改什么！只是要注意下時態(tài)的一致，和關(guān)聯(lián)詞的使用。學(xué)會連句成篇。有時候，狀語在前或是在后對整個語流影響都是挺大的。你注意對照一下，那點點問題究竟出在哪。：）