The first problem of SNS affects people’s privacy is that People are too dependent on privacy generated by the interests.Most of the ordinary people are living with interests,let along merchants.For these businessmen,their goal is to make money,and to achieve this thay have to provide the personalized product and service to consumers.Take internet-using merchants for example,if they want to truly excel at their joint forces,they must be careful to offer all the personal information but not tresspass the boundary of privacy as carefully as they can.However,the paradox is ,people want to get more information and improve the social communication simultaneously.That leads to the approach of usinh the internet platforms to connect others,and therefore,the personal privacy is slowing drifting beyond the individuals awareness in the process of close communication.According to the US,collecting data violates no laws,and tracking companies are largely unregulated.There is no agreement on what should be out of bounds,such as employment,financial or medical data.That means,considering its side affects,merchants are available to sorts of private information that tens of millions of Internet users have no ability to stop it.
童鞋~說(shuō)實(shí)在的這段話(huà)確實(shí)很難一時(shí)半會(huì)改好.你的思路結(jié)構(gòu)還是挺好的,道理也講的蠻清楚.但是,語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤和邏輯漏洞太多了,導(dǎo)致我第一次看這段話(huà)愣是沒(méi)看懂.現(xiàn)在我雖然稍微修改了下,但還是治標(biāo)不治本.建議稍改一下整體行文結(jié)構(gòu).加油啦~