I‘m writing this letter to recommend a restaurant to your newspaper and other people which【which用得不對,因為是人物的先行詞,這里我建議把other people which換成those who會更高級】 focus on the paper.
The restaurant possesses a beautiful name which is【刪去which is會更簡潔明了】 called the Hangzhou West Lake Restaurant because of its location next to【of its location next to改為it is located next to】 the famous West Lake.We family were invited 【添加一個to】the restaurant and enjoyed a nice meal,including dongpo meat,xihu fish and delicious buffet .The meal was so tasteful that we all felt an tremendous honor of being invited to enjoy the meal.【這里的being inveited to enjoy the meal出現(xiàn)有點多了,有點繁瑣,應(yīng)改為feeding our stomaches heavenly.】
So【so換成Therefore】 I am happy to recommend【用suggest,一個單詞用得太多老師會疲倦的】 the restaurant to other people【other people還是換回those】 who like enjoying food and feel 【feel改成feeling】native custom of Hangzhou .Look forward to your good taste【taste換成journey】 in the West Lake Restaurant.
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