My father bought a computer as a birthday present for me last year.It becomes my best friend in my room.I’d like to play on the computer as soon as I get home.At weekends,I often play games on line with my friends.I’ve made a lot of friends on the Intenet.But my eyesight becomes poorer and poorer,
1 I'd like 是I would like,是想要；愿意,此處改為I like即可
2 eyesight becomes poorer and poorer,應(yīng)該為eyesight is becoming poorer and poorer因?yàn)閎e becoming是逐漸變得的意思