When we learned over the radio that the Autonomous Prefecture of Yushu（此處加 was,應(yīng)該用被動(dòng)語態(tài),看介詞by） hit by a terrible earthquake on the (去掉,習(xí)慣用法.此處不用冠詞 )April 14th,2010,killed（改為killing,現(xiàn)在分詞做結(jié)果狀語） more than2,000 people,we became very worried.It is said that many houses were ruined,so you couldn't have your classes as usually（改為usual,as usual 像通常那樣）.I wonder if things have improve（改為improved,現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)） by now.
As for yourself,don't give in（改為up,give in 屈服讓步,不及物動(dòng)詞短語；give up 放棄） hope and be strongminded when facing the great difficult（改為difficulty,形容詞great應(yīng)修飾名詞） because of people all over the country is（改為are,主語是people） standing by you.And please keepin touch with me and I will try my best to help you.Beside（改為Besides,副詞,此外,而且）,the government is trying to
help the people in the disaster-hit areas rebuild their home.I believe the day will soon come that you overcome all the difficultes and live the（改為 a .live a ...life過著...的生活） new life.
Hope to get your early reply.