才看到樓主的話,既然這樣說,我又做了許多修改,添加了一些高級句型,在文章中以數(shù)字一一說明.
總體來說這篇讀后感寫的很好,只有一些小問題,多屬于時(shí)態(tài)方面和細(xì)節(jié)方面的.我稍微做了一些修改和潤色.
一樓說的也很好,但是樓主只讓修改這篇文章的語病,我就這樣做了,如果有問題,還可私聊.
My favourite great book is Three Days to See written by Helen Keller.This book impressed me（1）.It told me how lucky we are.Helen had a serious illness when she was nineteen months.Although she survived from the illness,she was unable to see and hear.She was in a fret at the beginning.But with the help of Sullivan ,she surmounted the difficulties .At last,she became a successful person（2）.
My favourite scene in the book is when Helen imagined three days to see（3）.She said “Oh,how many things I can see if I had the power of sight for just three days!”we can see,how precious it was for Helen Keller （4）.But （5）,I think that people can realize the importance of the sight and sound only after they have personally expericenced the dark and silence life（6）.
Helen is the hero of the story,but there are （7）other important characters.Sullivan is a patient teacher （8）and she gave her love to Helen（9）,she let Helen have confidence and help her get out of darkness days（10）.
The themes of the book are to do with persistence and life（11）.It describes how Helen spent the dark and silence life（12）.Finally,it talks about the meaning of life and how to spend our life meaningful（13）.
1 impressed me后面加上a lot,更好,還有時(shí)態(tài)有點(diǎn)問題,改為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí).
2 became a successful person后面加上who was worth others' respect,值得別人的尊敬.
3 imagined three days to see后面改為imagined that she had three days to see
4 這里最好補(bǔ)充說明一下為什么很珍貴,我加上了if she realized that dream如果她實(shí)現(xiàn)了那個(gè)夢想
5 這里沒有轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系,改為After finishing reading this book,讀完這本書后
6 the dark and silence life改為the darkness and silence of life生命中的黑暗和寂靜
7 other改為some other一些其它的
8 Sullivan is a patient teacher 改為Sullivan was a patient teacher ,時(shí)態(tài)問題
9 she gave her love to Helen改為she lavished affection on Helen,她對海倫傾注了所有的愛
10 and help her get out of darkness days.改為and helped her get out of dark days.
11這句話略顯平淡,我改成A theme of persistence and life is proposed in this boook.這本書揭示了恒心和人生的主題.
12the dark and silence life改為the dark and silent life,這樣不與上文重復(fù)
13最后一句是收尾,需是點(diǎn)睛之筆,我改成I appreciate Hellen Keller.Her life is a miracle,she stronly face the difficulties which can detroy one’s mind of living.Her life is a tragedy,but the world in her heart is full of love.Her spirit will encourage all of us,forever.
改過的文章如下：
My favourite great book is Three Days to See written by Helen Keller.This book impresses me a lot.It tells me how lucky we are.Helen had a serious illness when she was nineteen months.Although she survived from the illness,she was unable to see and hear.She was in a fret at the beginning.But with the help of Sullivan ,she surmounted the difficulties .At last,she became a successful person who was worth others' respect.
My favourite scene in the book is when Helen imagined that she had three days to see.She said “Oh,how many things I can see if I had the power of sight for just three days!”we can see,how precious it was for Helen Keller if she realized that dream.After finishing reading this book,I think that people can realize the importance of the sight and sound only after they have personally expericenced the darkness and silence of life.
Helen is the hero of the story,but there are some other important characters.Sullivan was a patient teacher and she lavished affection on Helen,and she let Helen have confidence and helped her get out of dark days.
A theme of persistence and life is proposed in this boook.It describes how Helen spent the dark and silent life.I appreciate Hellen Keller.Her life is a miracle,she stronly face the difficulties which can detroy one’s mind of living.Her life is a tragedy,but the world in her heart is full of love.Her spirit will encourage all of us forever.