求英語(yǔ)大神們幫忙修改我的英語(yǔ)作文
由于曾經(jīng)懸賞100分沒(méi)人回答,故先給少一些,過(guò)后見(jiàn)答案,隨時(shí)可以加分
以下是我30分鐘寫的英語(yǔ)作文,錯(cuò)漏百出但實(shí)屬無(wú)奈,英語(yǔ)那叫一個(gè)水,望大神們幫忙修改,百般感謝!
（中文部分是自的思路,但無(wú)法用英文正確描述,供大神們?cè)谛薷臅r(shí)作參照）
The question that the retirement age wether should be raised is allways title on the news paper.You may be lookover it but the question will come to you when you will retire tomorrow.
Partical of us are making plauses to raised the retirement age.Woking longer is their dreamwork and it will make them practical.They will be impractical if it is nothing to do on one day.
But the opsite opinion is still there.It is not need to raised the retirement age.People should receive the truth that they are so old to complete the work.And it is time to please theirselves without work.
So it is hard to deal with.I can't follow these two opinion.The cases are varily and no the beter way to let everyone promise.Retirement age may be raised if the work is physical and not good to one's body.It can fit to practical work.
是否應(yīng)該提高退休年齡這一問(wèn)題常常見(jiàn)于報(bào)端.你今天也許會(huì)忽略它,但是退休時(shí)它就是你遇到的問(wèn)題.
如若提高退休年齡,我們當(dāng)中的一部分人會(huì)為之鼓掌.能延長(zhǎng)工作年限是他們的夢(mèng)想,且能讓他們感到踏實(shí).如若某一天沒(méi)有工作,他們就會(huì)覺(jué)得空虛.
但是持相反觀點(diǎn)的人還是有的.他們覺(jué)得提高退休年齡沒(méi)有必要.人們必須接受身體衰老而不能繼續(xù)勝任工作這一事實(shí).而且是時(shí)候在沒(méi)有工作的困擾下享受生活了.
所以很難去處理這一問(wèn)題.我也不茍同于上述兩個(gè)觀點(diǎn).由于情況很多很難找到滿足個(gè)人的需求的方法.如若是較繁重的體力型工作或?qū)ι眢w有損害的工作,建議適當(dāng)縮短退休年齡.這樣可以適應(yīng)實(shí)際情況.