樓主,恕我直言,文章語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤和用詞錯(cuò)誤比較多,我本來(lái)打算把每個(gè)修改的地方再?gòu)?fù)述下錯(cuò)誤原因等,但我發(fā)現(xiàn)太多了.我大概談下主要錯(cuò)誤吧
1.句子成分問(wèn)題,每個(gè)句子只能有一個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞,連接2個(gè)句子用連詞,若并列關(guān)系還可以用分號(hào).在句子成分這個(gè)方面,樓主問(wèn)題最多
2.用代詞指代everyone, every body的所屬格時(shí),用 his or her 或者 his/her ,不能用its
3.先問(wèn)好,再說(shuō)ladies and gengtle,習(xí)慣問(wèn)題
4.注意謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞單復(fù)數(shù)形式
5.Olympic Games 不加冠詞 the
以下我修改好了的,你自己看吧
Good afternoon,Ladies and Gentlemen!
As we all know, Beijing will hold Olympic Games in 2008, and everybody is eager to look forward to it. Carefully observing the life in detail, we can easily see that the Olympic spirit is pervasive.
Neighbors help each other; colleagues, in spite of competition, are aware that the friendship comes first. Everyone has started to protect his or her surrounding environment. Olympic atmosphere is diffused to my home as well----parents pay great attention to the information of the Olympic Games, and all brothers and sisters take turns to talk about the various stories related to Olympic Games.
Everyone has his or her own expectation about Olympic Games, and I also believe that China will certainly be able to better organize Olympic Games and win honor for our country !
I am proud of being a Chinese. I hope my country to be much stronger. I look forward to 2008, and I will say to the world aloud: Welcome to Beijing.
Good Luck to 2008 Beijing Olympic Games
That's all. Thanks for your listening.