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Problems Among Teenagers
As a teenager.I have a lot of problems such as （加一個(gè)with,have problem with sth.)homework and some(some改為other會(huì)比較好）things.In my school,there are a lot of homeworks.We always should（把should 和always換下位置 或者改成we are always supposed to) do the homework until the(跟后面的12o'clock一樣 此處不用the) 11o'clock.sometime even 12 o'clock.I feel very tried（單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤 你想寫的應(yīng)該是tired) for(對(duì)某事厭煩是be tired of 此處用錯(cuò)了） the homework.But i find（have found這里可以用現(xiàn)在完成進(jìn)行時(shí)態(tài)）a way to change this（這里完全可以加一個(gè)situation）.I can do the homework in the class.Then use some sentences that let me afraid.（這句話不能理解 是不是你想寫你的同學(xué)們說(shuō)你這樣不好 首先 單詞錯(cuò)誤they而不是then 按你的意思 可以改成they said something that made me feel afaid.） I feel（用過(guò)去式felt） very sad (此處加一個(gè)and ）even hate（過(guò)去式哦 hated) the classmates(可以用them 代替）.I think(過(guò)去式哦 thought) out a way（改成to solve this problem可能會(huì)比較好哦) about this thing.Do not to they.（這里是不是想表達(dá) 不理他們?這樣的話可以連著后面那句 用it is the best way for me to regardless of them)It is a best way for me.
我覺(jué)得整體來(lái)說(shuō) 還是寫的不錯(cuò)的.不過(guò)在今后的寫作中 要注意時(shí)態(tài)還有單詞拼寫的問(wèn)題.
ps：最好不好在課堂上寫作業(yè)咯 因?yàn)?這樣 也許你就會(huì)漏掉老師在課堂上講的內(nèi)容啦 不要因小失大哦~
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