An Unforgettable Help

I'll finish my study in junior middle school soon.【(接下來(lái)是我寫(xiě)的)But every time when I think of a girl,my heart will filled with pleasure①

Once I took a Chinese exam.Unluckily,I failed it .It's my first time to fail a exam,so I was very guilty and worried.And I was in a bad mood while I was in class③.Suddenly,somebody② came to me,she asked me why I was so unhappy.I told her.Then she said:"Come on girl!There are still something else you did very well!Look at the great results in your English and Math!" she talked to me for a long time ,then I felt better. ⑥】

（接下來(lái)是作文給出的已有句子）Thanks for your help,my best friend .I will never forget our friendship!

問(wèn)題

①(需要復(fù)數(shù)嗎).

②(用someone可以嗎?感覺(jué)不順口)

③是不是有點(diǎn)啰嗦（麻煩修改）

⑥覺(jué)得這句怪怪的

2.修改一些錯(cuò)誤（包括拼寫(xiě)）

3.最后的句子銜接的突兀,但【】里的內(nèi)容有字?jǐn)?shù)限制（60~80詞..我已經(jīng)超到100詞了..）,寫(xiě)一下你的修改?~

請(qǐng)?jiān)诔踔兴嚼镄薷?謝謝!O(∩_∩)O