有一點(diǎn)小問題.
1、professional拼錯(cuò)啦.不過這個(gè)說法本來就不地道,如果你想說他退役了,可以說he has retired as a professional player或者h(yuǎn)e is no longer a professional player,這樣可以強(qiáng)調(diào)退役的動(dòng)作或者是不再打球的狀態(tài),比普通的系動(dòng)詞連接有感覺哦
2、he has his company and his basketball team 的確中文里會(huì)說“他有了自己的公司和球隊(duì)”,但是畢竟英語更注重一個(gè)動(dòng)作.你要強(qiáng)調(diào)的無非是“喬丹在退役之后還是有所作為”,所以這里就應(yīng)該更強(qiáng)調(diào)建立的動(dòng)作（如果球隊(duì)是收購的那就強(qiáng)調(diào)收購的動(dòng)作）,建議說he established his own company and basketball team
3、和前面的朋友一樣,我也覺得as a result 不好.畢竟這不是一個(gè)因果連詞.as a result意思是“以上導(dǎo)致的結(jié)果是”,而不是“所以”.可以直接將as a result 刪除,不會(huì)影響句子的.
4、He is a great people?people作復(fù)述表示人們,做單數(shù)表示一國人民.喬丹小盆友是民族英雄吼吼.^_^應(yīng)該用person
英語功底還是可以的.再接再厲!