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1、當(dāng)我走進(jìn)這間屋后,我的眼睛迅速適應(yīng)了昏暗的房間.可否譯成：My eyes quickly adapted to the darkness shortly after entering this room.或My eyes were quickly accustomed to the
quickly與shortly重復(fù)了,留一個(gè)即可.其他沒(méi)有什么問(wèn)題
2、他終于承認(rèn)這是他的錯(cuò).可否譯成：He finally acknowledges that it was he fault.
謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞acknowledge最好用一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài),另外it was his fault.
簡(jiǎn)單點(diǎn)翻譯：He finially acknowledged his fault.