幫我看看這篇英語作文有沒有語法錯(cuò)誤
題目：假設(shè)你是TOM,請根據(jù)提示以“MY Unforgettable Experience"為題寫一篇80字左右的作文,記敘一次難忘的經(jīng)歷,提示：Tom 的父母晚上有事外出,知道11點(diǎn)才回家.9歲的他自己一個(gè)人在家,當(dāng)門外有人走過時(shí),他還哦??；聽到外面的房間他更害怕,后來才發(fā)現(xiàn)是自家的小貓,以前從未單獨(dú)在家的他便有 了一次難忘的經(jīng)歷.
My unforgettable experience
i was had a unforgettable experience when i was nine years old. ican't forget it forever. on that day,my parents had to go out for dinner,but i can't go out with them. i had to do my homework.
i heard someone walked while iwas doing my homework. iwas crying,because i was fear. When i can'thear walked, i stop crying. i was watching tv in my bed room when i finished my homework. i heard the voice out of the room. i was more frightened. But i thought i should be more brave. i went out of the room. it was my cat. iwas relax when i saw my cat. And i played with my cat.my parents didn't go home until at 11 pm.
i think it's my unforttable experience bearuse it was the first time for me to stay in a place alone
我英語程度不是很好.英語作文一直是我的眼中刺.
請高人指點(diǎn).