My winter holiday is very dull.
此句建議用過去時,改為：My winter holiday was very dull.
I stay at home for most of time.
此句時態(tài)不對,因為有for,所以要用完成時,而且應該是most of (the) time,原句中缺少了定冠詞,改為：I have stayed at home for most of the time.
I always homework.
此句缺少動詞,改為：I always did my homework.
但是我建議這句句子和上面那句合并較好,即：I have stayed at home for most of the time.+I have always done my homework.→I have stayed at home and done my homework for most of the time.
I usually help my parents do household chores.
這里沒必要用usually,且help正確的用法是help sb.to do sth.,改為：I helped my parents to do some household chores.
During winter break we have had a happy Spring Festival.
此句中寒假的正確表達是winter vacation而不是winter break,且這里可直接用一般過去時而非現在完成時,改為：During winter vacation we had a happy Spring Festival.
My father and mother gave me a prepared
New Year's money.
money不可數所以不能用a而是用定冠詞the,new year直接小寫就可以了,還有如果你想用prepare不如這樣寫,改為：My father and mother prepared the new year's money for me.(不用prepare的話則可寫成：My father and mother gave me the new year's money.)
I and my fellow students to do volunteer bookstores and supermarkets.
英語里習慣把I放在最后,如：You,he and "I";fellow是同學的意思,所以my fellow students的意思就成了“我的同學學生”,還是去掉students好,還有這里不需要在動詞前加to,“volunteer bookstores and supermarkets”→ bookstores and supermarkets' volunteer(s),改為：My fellow and I became the bookstores and supermarkets' volunteers.
We work very hard.
這里要用過去時,改為：We worked very hard.
I have read some books and read "Affan up" the film.
用過去時就可以了,還有電影是watch的而不是read的,the film不能放在
Affan up后面,改為：I read some books and watched a film called "Affan up" .
It is very interesting.
前面提到了some books and watched a film called "Affan up",所以it is變成they are 改為：They are very interesting.
整理后全文如下：My winter holiday was very dull.I have stayed at home and done my homework for most of the time.I helped my parents to do some household chores.During winter vacation we had a happy Spring Festival.My father and mother prepared the new year's money for me.My fellow and I became the bookstores and supermarkets' volunteers.We worked very hard.I read some books and watched a film called "Affan up" .They are very interesting.
你總體寫的很好哦~
回答完畢~,