雅思小作文批改
這是我寫(xiě)的,劍橋雅思第五冊(cè),test two 中的writing rask 1
肯定寫(xiě)得不怎么樣,但我下個(gè)月就要去考.希望高手們能夠給點(diǎn)意見(jiàn),哪些地方錯(cuò)啦,哪些地方用其它的方式表達(dá)更好啊,或者哪些詞匯用其它的更準(zhǔn)確啊之類的.辛苦了
The chart shows the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
In the first chart ,there are two reasons for study,career and interest.According to the pattern ,before 40 years old ,the proportions of study fo career of each group are more than the proportions that study for interest .However ,in group of age from 40 to 49 ,it is half and half that people are studying for career or for interest.The last group that age over 49 has much more proportion of study for interest.It is a big change.
The second chart shows employers support much more the group under 26 than any other groups in the pattern,and the reason must be that they spend more time and energy studying for career.Unfortunately,althouth the groups of 26 to 29 and 30 to 39 also have more proprotions to study for career,they dip of their proportions of employers support.From 40 to 49 age group to over 49 group ,the proportions rise a little .But ,the people whose age over 40,they do not learn for career more than younger people .Maybe it is because they got enough exprience from period time when they were working and learning.
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要是我有那么大的詞匯量或者我能那么靈活的運(yùn)用單詞,我當(dāng)然不會(huì)去重復(fù)運(yùn)用那些詞匯啦.完全沒(méi)學(xué)過(guò)雅思課程,也從來(lái)沒(méi)有背過(guò)什么范文.不過(guò)我最近著手在背了,還有十天的樣子去考,考了估計(jì)還得繼續(xù)報(bào)一月的.