求批改雅思小作文~
我是新手,學(xué)了兩節(jié)課,求批改!是圖表題,表沒有,就是請各位高手幫我看看語法和用詞什么的~
The pie chart describes students' spending on different things,such as rent,food,school fees,entertainment,clothes and so on.
Then,it can be seen from the pie chart that spending for six purpose.Specitically,rent and foodfor the largest one is ￡100 of the spending while the school fees cost ￡90.Then,student spends ￡60 on entertainment for fun.Also,underground costs entertainment25 while the clothes represents ￡20.Study materials occupys ￡5
There fore,it can be clearly seen from the pie chart that rent and food accounts for the greast part of spending on.
只有一個餅圖。有沒有大俠幫我把語法錯誤圈一下啊，完事之后再加15分