在你的基礎(chǔ)上改一些錯的地方,當(dāng)然,在句子結(jié)構(gòu)和樣式多樣上還需要下功夫.好的文章不是用的詞多,而是用了恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~
It is very necessary to be a good university studend（student).Good university students is (are)the foundation of the construction of the motherland.If you didn't(don't因?yàn)槟阒v的是一個客觀的事,不是指過去） want to be a good student you will lose the best opportunity to study.
How to be a good university student?There are several prerequistes（這個好像寫錯了吧,可以改為factors) to be a good university student:good character,study hard(并列幾個名詞詞組,可以用hard study）,health(healthy) body,etc.
What I will do in the future is as follows（following).I'll help anybody
who need(needs) help.I'll cherish this chance to(of,珍惜學(xué)習(xí)的機(jī)會） study.I(will) play basketball twice a week ,so I don't worry about my healty（health).