1.Everyone in his English class must have group work.
去掉be 不需要被動(dòng)
2.I like my group work,because it can help me learn English better.
because 打頭字母小寫 中間用逗號(hào) 因?yàn)榍昂笫且痪湓?不是兩句
3.I am looking forward that our English group would be more successful.
am looking 進(jìn)行時(shí)態(tài)表示持續(xù)期盼的心情
that 之后引出的是一句完整的句子 that作為引導(dǎo)詞引出從句 所以不用to
would委婉的說法 用來表達(dá)希望的心情
4.I would like to tell them some suggestions that if we think over our ideas,we will be much better.
that 后是跟的是前面的單詞suggestions的同位語從句 也就是對(duì)建議的內(nèi)容說明了一下
寫成一個(gè)復(fù)合句 文章比較流暢 有銜接性
5.上下文加些適當(dāng)?shù)你暯釉~ 不然好像是一堆句子流水賬
改的也許有點(diǎn)難 不知道能不能理解
Everyone in his English class must have group work.I like my group work,because it can help me learn English better.And we can save time to deal with a lot of questions.I knew Peter and Linda in the class,they are my classmates.I would like to tell them some suggestions that if we think over our ideas,we will be much better.Sometimes one of us in our group is in difficulty,at this moment we must try our best to help him or her.I do belive ‘where there's a will,there's a way.’I am looking forward that our English group would be more successful.