A.B.Good morning everyone!Today we [would like to] tell you about our dream[s].
good morning后面不用停頓,直接就good morning everyone就可以了.would like to...:想,希望可以.這樣說(shuō)比較適合,另外因?yàn)槭莾蓚€(gè)人,所以dream應(yīng)該是dreams
A.I'm two minutes [older] than my sister ．So I'm [the] older sister.
B.And I am two minutes [younger] than my sister.So I am [the] younger sister.
AB.We are twins.We look the same.But [we are also different.]
這里我稍微改了一下,我想你的意思是說(shuō)雖然我們長(zhǎng)的一樣,可是有的時(shí)候還是不一樣的.可是我覺(jué)得更好的表達(dá)是“我們雖然長(zhǎng)得一樣,我們卻是不一樣的兩個(gè)人”.
A.[When I was a young child] I want[ed] to be a shop assistant.
“小的時(shí)候”的英文翻譯很中國(guó)英語(yǔ).比較順暢的還是“當(dāng)我還是小孩子的時(shí)候”.另外還有一個(gè)錯(cuò)誤（后面也有同樣的錯(cuò)誤）,就是want的過(guò)去式.因?yàn)槟鞘悄阍?jīng)的夢(mèng)想,所以必須用過(guò)去式wanted.
B.Oh,Why?
A.Because [our mom told] me [that] the assistant can eat a lot of [food].So I [was] very happy,[and] I want[ed] to be a shop assistant.
這里你用的是mother,雖然沒(méi)有錯(cuò),可是你是和你的妹妹說(shuō)話,用mother會(huì)太生疏.同樣的因?yàn)槭呛兔妹迷谡f(shuō)話,my mother的my也被改成了our（我們的～）.還有就是is的過(guò)去式：was,want和wanted.
B.[I wanted] to [become] a scientist.
嚴(yán)格來(lái)說(shuō)語(yǔ)法方面to be也是正確的,可是因?yàn)槟闶窍Ｍ蔀榭茖W(xué)家,become會(huì)更適合.
A.Why?
B.Because scientists [can become] very famous.[They will then have] a lot of money.
can become是可以變成,可以成為～的意思.當(dāng)然同樣的,因?yàn)樗麄兛梢宰兂擅?也will,將會(huì)擁有很多錢.
AB.Then in the primary [school],we [also had] different dreams.
primary不是小學(xué)的意思.小學(xué)是primary school或elemenray school.要加上school哦～還有就是had是have的過(guò)去式,要注意你是說(shuō)小學(xué)的事情,所以也是要用過(guò)去式哦.
A.I want[ed] to be a teacher .
B.Why?
A.Because teacher[s] can give students lots homework.What about you?
覺(jué)得用teachers比the teacher好很多,因?yàn)椴还馐且粋€(gè)老師可以啊,很多老師都可以給學(xué)生好多作業(yè)哦～第二點(diǎn)就是a lots,這個(gè)是錯(cuò)誤的,要不是lots,沒(méi)有a的,要不就是a lot.
B.I want[ed] to be a painter.
A.Why is that?
B.Because I love painting .I [wished to] have Ma Liang's Magic pen.I [thought that was exciting].
同樣的,時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤.
A.[But] now I want to be a writer.You know why?
At now是完全的中國(guó)英語(yǔ).你想說(shuō)現(xiàn)在,實(shí)際上直接Now開(kāi)始就可以了,不用加前面的At的.不過(guò)我放了一個(gè)But在前面,因?yàn)檫@樣會(huì)比較流暢.還有就是That is cool《自己說(shuō)自己有點(diǎn)自大啊,哈哈～還是刪了吧,
B.No,[why?]
A.Because I love reading [so much]!And [lots of people read your books if you're a writer].How about you?
這里按照原意改了.mach的意思和much完全不一樣哦,要注意.
B.Um,I want to be [an] engineer.
a 和 an,元音前是an哦.
A.Why [engineer]?
不用啰嗦,直接問(wèn)“為什么要當(dāng)engineer?”
B.Because engineers [can design and] build house[s].
我剪短了不少.意思也表達(dá)的更清楚了.engineer們可以設(shè)計(jì)以及建造房子.
A.This is a good dream.
AB.[We always say to] ourselves "[nothing is impossible]" Everyone has dream[s].[Dreaming is the first step to achieving.]
we are是“我們是～”的意思,所以你覺(jué)得“我們是對(duì)自己說(shuō)～”在中文里面通嗎?所以我改成了we always～,意思是“我們總是～”.另外如果用“我們”對(duì)自己說(shuō)的話的話,“I always～”比較不適合,所以干脆就避開(kāi),用一句很經(jīng)典的“nothing is impossible”（沒(méi)有不可能的）.最后的一句真的看了幾邊才明白意思,我想你是想表達(dá)只要趕夢(mèng)想,總會(huì)達(dá)到（或者類似）的意思吧.Dreaming is the first step to achieving是說(shuō)“去夢(mèng)想是成功的第一步”
AB.That's all.Thank you [for listening].
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不好意思我比較啰嗦啊～不過(guò)不光要趕作業(yè),我覺(jué)得如果意思明白的話,背起來(lái)會(huì)更輕松一點(diǎn)吧.Good luck!