既然你說不用客氣指出你的文章錯(cuò)處,那麼很對(duì)不起,我認(rèn)為的確有很多錯(cuò)處,現(xiàn)在替你更正一下罷.
Today,environmental pollution has been increasingly (seriously 改為 serious).
Discuss the reasons why environment is polluted and (give 改為 suggest) some solutions (to 改為 for) it.
In the past,there are nearly no pollution in the world,however,with the development of economy,the environment is (加 now) confronted (a 改為 by this) grave issue.
First of all,the most significant reason that results in the environmental pollution is industry,Many factories (discharge 改為 are discharging) the effluent and poisonous air (加 and waste) into the river and sky.It causes the death of a lot of aquatic organism and the pollution of the atmosphere.And (in the city,the vehicles become more and more 這句要重新整理為:there are more and more vehicles in the city),at the same time,the exhaust that the vehicles (discharged 改為 discharging) are becoming more and more as well,it aggravate(加 s) the air pollution and make(加 s) the air turbid.In the farm(加 s),farmers use chemical pesticide and fertilizer so that they can get a high yield (in harvest seasons 改為 for their crops).(It 改為 they) make the (fertile soil change infertile 改為 soil more fertile).
In my opinion,countries on this planet must join forces to combat environmental problems.The governments should (prevent the quantity of 改為 outlaw 或 punish those) factories which (does 改為 do) not have (percolation 是 precaution) measures,and elevate the public awareness of (environment 是 environmental) production.The farmer(s) should reduce the usage of chemical product(s),( do not mak改為 it would not make) the soil (去掉more) infertile .
All in all,the environment cannot be more adverse.On the contrary,if people do not take care of this matter,(in the end 要放在後面),(去掉the) human beings will perish (in the end 或用 eventually).
但本人卻沒有評(píng)分的能力,只知原文分?jǐn)?shù)或許不會(huì)太高,請(qǐng)?jiān)徫疫^於坦率.
更改後的版本雖然仍非完美,但應(yīng)可合格,隱拿6分以上.
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