高手幫我批改一下這篇英語作文
高手幫我批改一下這篇英語作文
幫我看看這篇作文,給我些具體 的意見,
One day I was about to go outside to play when I saw my mother being busy with several housework at the same time.She looked so tired,and I felt guilty,Therefore I made a determination to share housework with her.I was about to wash the clothes when my friend called me up and asked me to play with her.I told her that I would go on the condition that completing my washing.Then I go on washing ,Only then did I realized it was such a tiring thing to wash clothes,and how tired my mother was.While my mother not only worked outside but also took the responsibility of our housework inside,she never complaint to us.After washing I felt tired though ,my mother praised me ,and said that I was a good child.I felt happy.
幫我看看這篇作文,給我些具體 的意見,
One day I was about to go outside to play when I saw my mother being busy with several housework at the same time.She looked so tired,and I felt guilty,Therefore I made a determination to share housework with her.I was about to wash the clothes when my friend called me up and asked me to play with her.I told her that I would go on the condition that completing my washing.Then I go on washing ,Only then did I realized it was such a tiring thing to wash clothes,and how tired my mother was.While my mother not only worked outside but also took the responsibility of our housework inside,she never complaint to us.After washing I felt tired though ,my mother praised me ,and said that I was a good child.I felt happy.
英語人氣:982 ℃時間:2020-05-14 19:36:29
優(yōu)質(zhì)解答
minking做的很好的一點是,想辦法用好句式和詞組.但是怎么用似乎還需要學(xué)習(xí).整個文章里的標(biāo)點符號用的不太好,似乎都是逗號?需要學(xué)會斷句,和正確使用標(biāo)點.以下提出我的建議:1.第一句里being去掉.busy with可以直接加在...
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