請英語高手幫我點評我的這篇英語四級作文,
1：本社團(tuán)的主要活動內(nèi)容
2：參加本社團(tuán)的好處
3：如何加入本社團(tuán)
Welcome to join the Sunshine volunteer club!If you have a love heart,you ought to join us.We will look in the older those who live alone and talk with them.In addition,we also go to the primary school to teach them interesting knowledge,for example,the interesting math,scientific knowledge and the storm of intelligence.
The Sunshine volunteer club will provide a opportunity to let you help the people who are poor or disabled.I think the activities will improve your ability of action or talk.Furthermore,people will work together and you will learn something how to get along well with others.Finally,you will make some friends in our club.
If you want to join our club,just call us at 691800 or send an email to Sunshine volunteer@hstc.edu.cn,with information attached.And after one week,you will be a member of our club.So don't hesitate,join us.