although I have studied my major for 5 years.But I know,my knowledge is limited,and I have a long way to go on my major.
標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中國(guó)式英語(yǔ).although和but不能一起用的!去掉其中一個(gè)
On the one hand...On the other hand不能亂用的
一般表示兩個(gè)相反的意思,突出內(nèi)容的對(duì)比性,相當(dāng)于but.
recommend也不是這樣用的.
要么recommend that...跟從句,
要么recommend sth.
要么recommend sb.to do..
recommend sth to sb是指把某物托付給某人,你的朋友把這所大學(xué)托付給你了?
應(yīng)改成：
I have studied my major for 5 years.But I know my knowledge is limited,and I have a long way to go on my major.Besides,my friend who graduated from your university recommended me to enter your university for a further study.
SO I think if I could have a chance to study at your school and finally obtain a Master’s Degree of Medicine,I would be very lucky!
首先,不要用school,那是給人家降檔次.
其次,So I think很累贅."I think..."這種句型只有在別人讓你表達(dá)看法,或者當(dāng)你成為了某一方面的權(quán)威,發(fā)表權(quán)威性看法的時(shí)候才能用.不知道為什么中國(guó)學(xué)生都喜歡用這兩個(gè)詞.
最后,句型應(yīng)該倒裝,把lucky放到前面去.
應(yīng)改成：It would be very lucky if I could have a chance to study at your university and obtain a Master's Degree of Medicine.
Could you please tell me something about your university such as the fee I should pay and how about the accommodation and their qualifications.
學(xué)費(fèi)有專有的一個(gè)詞：tuition,不要用fee.
還有我不知道你的qualifications是指什么?指入住宿舍的資格條件嗎?如果不是的話就把qualifications放到第一個(gè)來(lái)講,畢竟這是最重要的.
Would you please give me some information about the qualification for your university,the tuition as well as the accommodation condition.